Review Comments of Report on Boy Who Would Be King

Scoring and Feedback for "Boy Who Would Be King"

Overall Score: 5.5

Breakdown of Scores (Weighted)

• Clarity and Grammar (40%): 5.5
• Vocabulary (25%): 5.5
• Structure (25%): 5.0
• Depth of Thought (10%): 6.0

Areas of Strength

✅ Good use of personal examples – You connected the book’s lessons to your own life (e.g., math test, your mum learning new things), which makes your writing engaging.

Spelling, Punctuation, and Capitalization Errors

🔴 Spelling:

• "huge read" → "hugely read" (or "read a lot")

🔴 Punctuation:

• "for example when I did my math test…" → "For example, when I did my math test…" (Capitalize "For" and add comma)
• "Rustics, Gave Marcus four books" → "Rusticus gave Marcus four books" (No comma, lowercase "gave")

🔴 Capitalization:

• "Rome" → Should be "Rome" (correct as is, but "emperor of Rome" would be better phrasing)
• "Rustics" → Should be "Rusticus" (assuming this is the correct name)

Areas for Improvement

1️⃣ Sentence Structure – Some sentences are choppy or awkwardly phrased (e.g., "Marcus as a boy learning to become an emperor Rome"). Try smoother transitions like:

• "Marcus was a boy learning to become the emperor of Rome."

2️⃣ Grammar & Word Choice – Avoid minor errors like missing articles ("an emperor Rome" → "the emperor of Rome") and awkward phrasing ("huge read" → "read a lot").

Final Thoughts

Your writing shows good personal reflection and understanding of the book’s lessons. With a little more attention to grammar and sentence flow, your work will become even stronger! Keep practicing! 🚀 by deepseek-chat